Ok I have a photo of dd... on It's a small world she is in my lap clapping along with the song.. and the flash hit her eyes just right there is a bit of a sparkle... So far I have gone thought about a thousand drafts of the journaling on this thing... and just could not get the feelings right so I decided on more of a poem feel... So this is what i Have....

I need advise PLEASE... Is it ok what needs to be changed what would you add???? PLEASE do share you so wont hurt my feelings...


The sparkle in her eyes,
the smile on her face,
and tiny hands clap as It's a
small world plays for the 100th time.

Lights,sound and movement....Watching
with wonderment as 1000's of dolls dance.

This is what childhood was meant to be....
every day should be just like this...


grammar and punctuations help is also welcome hehe

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Come on 40!!!